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levil666
03-25-2009, 03:19 PM
"Where the fuck did that bastard go?"

I suddenly felt a sense of coolness engulf me. At least Drew would make it. At least Drew would be safe...

"Well, I guess it doesn't matter too much. He just won't have any family, just like me. This is really just between us, isn't it?"
-Don't make it easy for her. What ever she does, fight back, Drew will do something.

"I have a special little surprise for you." She said through that blood streaked mask, all the while clutching the back of the chair that held my mother's poor grizzled corpse. Then she walked over to the black duffle bag, and came back with a pair of shears.
-God no.

"I figured that since you were so unfaithful during our marriage, I would remove the part that got us into that trouble."
-She can't be serious. She can't do this.

"Alice, take a minute here. Why would you want to do this? I've never hurt you. I was always faithful."

"Why do you LIE." She screamed as she jumped across the room and cut off my pinky.

"I'll let you try to justify yourself, but each time you do, it's going to cost you a finger."
-Fair price, I guess, as long as I get to keep my dick.

"That secretary, Alice, I never slept with her. I wouldn't do that to you and Drew. That is one of the lowest forms of betrayal."

"I wouldn't do that to you and Drew, always with your bullshit." She snipped of my ring finger, and dangled it in front of my face. This was the finger that once held my wedding band.

"Whatever happened to until death do us part sweetheart." She snarled sarcastically, tossing my finger to the side, where it landed on my mother's lap.

"You know, this is taking too long. Let's spice things up." She said as she set the shears down and picked up the hatchet.

"You want to keep this hand, yell for Drew to come back up."

"Fuck you Cunt." I spat, as she hacked off my left hand.

Suddenly, there was a flash of red an blue out front, and screeching tires. Drew had done it. He had saved himself, and possibly saved...

"Shit, that little fucker has really done it this time, hasn't he? Well, I guess our time is up. Shall we do this?" Alice shrugged and went back to the duffel bag one more time. She pulled from it my father's old snub nosed .357. She was going to kill me, then herself.

"I figured that there should be a plan B, just in case sweetheart." She said smiling at the blue steeled barrel.
-Well, goodbye world. Please don't be too cruel to Drew.

Just as she was starting to take aim, the police kick in the door. Alice gets off a shot. I see a shotgun shell blow out the front of her chest just before everything fades to black.

I wake up on the stretcher being wheeled out from that hell hole. I see Drew waiting by the ambulance with a towel around him for warmth. He starts crying just as I am rolled up to him.

"Good job son. I am so proud of you." I could only barely get that much through the oxygen mask. Alice's final shot had been at my chest. I think she may have been aiming for my heart, but the rush pushed her aim off to my right shoulder. At least it was all over now. Drew and I could finally go on living without anymore disturbances.

woodenheart
03-25-2009, 05:11 PM
:celebrate::celebrate: awesome, really loved it, beautifully written, right to the point and alittle gruesome... bravo!!

KING
03-25-2009, 09:19 PM
:yes: Sweet finale! I was hoping he wouldn't die. I actually felt something for the characters. :thumbup3: