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Wasn't very good, but I wouldn't discourage you to not try again.
Go back and remake it. This time actually try and create a distinctive lighting scheme. Just using your Apartments actual lighting looks blaaah. Even if you're going for ultra realism it looks blah. Apartments are just white on white on white. Get some Party gels. Play around with different camera angles too and add some foreground elements. try moving the camera too. It looks more cinematic when you start a shot moving on the Y or X axis.
You kind of display a repetitive daily routine, meat gets low, head out, kill. Embellish this with more repetitious cuts and art direction. Find wall art or a shirt and tie for the killer a repetitive pattern.
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I feel like you're going for the depiction of a desensitized routine, devoid of emotion, including rage or anger. I like that. I think that neat little statements like that can be effective, especially if no explanation is given as to a motive behind the madness.
That being said, if you choose to go that route, it's important to give the audience something to cling on to so that they care about the brutality they're being exposed to. Even if you don't develop the character of the murderer, you can delve into the lives of his victims, or maybe hint as to a rhyme or reason to his madness.
Try to work on that and some of the other constructive criticism from other users, and shoot something else! I'm excited to see how you improve!